Three Rewrites Down and More to Go

I've now completed three rewrites on my young-adult manuscript.  I hope to finish it in two or three weeks. I do plan to take Memorial Day off and enjoy the holiday.

In the latest rewrite, I removed one scene that was too similar to an earlier scene and rewrote the ending. I still  have more work to do on the final chapter to wrap up everything.

In the third rewrite, besides the deleted scene and final chapter, I concentrated on description in the manuscript. I also cut needless words in the narrative and dialogue. 

I wanted to trim the fat by about 2K words but only managed 500. I'm not sure if there'll be much more slicing and dicing in the next rewrite.

Until the next time...

Keeping Up with the Weather

Do you remember the Chiffon margarine commercial on television back in the 1970s that cautioned, “It’s not nice to fool Mother Nature”?   

Mother Nature, as we’ve seen throughout history, can wreak all kinds of havoc on people and places and things. And that’s not even when we’re trying to fool her. 

After what happened when a monster tornado roared through Moore, Okla., the past week, I’ve purchased a weather radio. I’ve generally been one to ride out a storm, but not anymore. And where I live in Kentucky, we have our share of tornadoes and straight line wind.

I’ve survived tornadoes, hurricanes, ice storms, blizzards, floods, lightning storms and other weather-related events, but the weather seems to be a bit haywire now with climate change thrown into the mix.

The radio will alert me to other dangers such as chemical spills, explosions, and other manmade disasters as well as earthquakes and volcanoes (something I don't want to experience). And even terrorist attacks.

I try to keep posted on changing weather conditions through the National Weather Service,  Weather Channel, Weather Bug, and local TV and radio newscasts. The radio will provide me with additional alerts from the National Weather Service, especially when I'm asleep or when the power goes out (the radio has battery backup). 

Here are come other interesting sites about weather radios:

Why buy a weather radio?

How to select the best weather radio for your needs

Weather radio

The Tornado Project

Here's hoping you have a nice day!

Until the next time...

Two Rewrites Down and More to Go

I've completed two rewrites on my manuscript. I wish it was ready for publication. Sadly, for me, it needs more work before becoming a book for young adults. 

I was able to tie some loose ends together but I found a few more holes along the way. I may also delete a scene that I'm not sure needs to be in the story. It'll probably be cut or rewritten.

And I'm not pleased with the ending. That's going to involve some major revisions on the third rewrite. 

Along the way I take notes on changes that need to be made. It makes it a lot easier when going back over the manuscript. I also need to add more description to characters and scenes.

So, as you can see, there's a lot of work to be done. 

I'll probably print the manuscript after the third rewrite. I find it useful to see the words on paper. I'll also take out my red pencil to mark it up -- a reminder of my early days as a journalist working on the copy desk.

I want to keep the manuscript in the 50k range, and now it's inching toward 52k.

I'll keep you posted after the third rewrite.

Until the next time...

An I for An I

One of the challenges I've faced while editing and rewriting my manuscript is making sure I don't lose my point of view. I'm writing in first person, which means the story is being told through the narrator.

That means that I only know what the narrator sees and hears and feels. I can't get into other character's heads (or multiple third person points of view). I can only surmise, through the narrator's thoughts and feelings, what others making be thinking and feeling. And don't we do that in real life?

This is the first time I've written in first person. It can be restrictive (for the above reason) but again it allows me to go more deeply into the narrator -- who is the main person in the story.

I get to express sadness and happiness, and everything in between in the protagonist. I'm able to share with more with the reader on a personal level.

The key for me -- a third-person kind of writer -- is to make sure I stay within the rules of first person. 

And since the manuscript is for the young-adult genre, I have to make sure that the narrator thinks and feels like a teenager. Now that's the biggest challenge!

Until the next time...

Story Songs: Any Way The Wind Blows

Beginning in the mid-1980s, there were crossover musical groups that appealed to both country and mainstream popular tastes including The Remingtons, Exile, Confederate Railroad, Kentucky HeadHunters, BlackHawk, and Restless Heart.

There have been others in the past that had a country flavor to some of their tunes, legendary groups such as The Byrds, Buffalo Springfield, The Flying  Burrito Brothers, Grateful Dead from the '60s and The Band, Poco and Eagles from the '70s.

A group I enjoyed was Southern Pacific, a country-rock band that produced four albums from 1985-91. The group included former members from The Doobie Brothers, Pablo Cruise, and Creedence Clearwater Revival. The muscianship and vocals were outstanding.

My favorite was "Any Way The Wind Blows," which reached No. 4 on the country charts in 1989. It was written by bandmember John McFee and Andre Pessis.

The lyrics remind me of the carefree years of youth when you have little fear and think you'll live forever:

"Life was an infinite number
Livin' one day to another
Lookin' for the end of summer
Any way the wind blows"

Also:

"Burnin' both ends of the candle
Can't wait 'bout the things we don't know
Going just as fast as we can go"

And:

"Doesn't matter if we lead or follow
No telling where we'll be tomorrow
Goin' somewhere, goin' full throttle"

And the chorus:
"And we can't see around the bend
We never know where the road might end
We just try to go any way the wind blows"

With the car analogy, it's no surprise the song was used in the soundtrack of Clint Eastwood's "Pink Cadillac" in 1989.
The song reminds me of the good times of my youth.

"Any Way The Wind Blows" lyrics



First Rewrite

I completed the first rewrite on my young-adult novel. After letting the words sit on mothballs for five months, it was time to go back and read it as an editor. 

Overall, I was pleasantly surprised by what I read. When I had finished the first draft on Nov. 30, I quickly closed it...and cringed a bit. But it wasn't nearly as bad as I thought it would be on first read. 

That's not to say that it's ready for publication. It's a long ways from seeing the light of day. But it's workable. Furthermore, I like the story. Those are big pluses.

I made a few grammatical changes. There were a few transitions that needed to be made. When I go back to it, there are some scenes that need to be more descriptive. Some characters also need to be more fully developed.

I adhere to Elmore Leonard's rule to cut out the stuff that people don't read. So that's something that will be getting more attention on the second rewrite. I want to keep it lean and fluid.

While I don't recommend waiting five months to go back to a manuscript, it certainly gave me a fresh look at my words. When I edit, I view the manuscript as I would if I were editing someone's writing.  

I'll give another update after the second rewrite.

Until the next time...

Story Songs: Kissing Time

  

   I believe most folks like to kiss. We’re usually kissed when we enter this world, and if surrounded by loved ones, kissed when we depart.

   Along the way, we receive an assortment of kisses – when we go to sleep, scruff our knees, birthday parties, weddings, reunions, and other occasions. These generally come from moms, dads, grandparents, relatives, and platonic friends.

  And then we have those romantic kisses that can take our breath away such as those from first loves, significant others, spouses, and others who can send shivers through your body.

  Click here to read some fun facts about kissing.

   This post was inspired by a Facebook friend. She has posted a couple of photos of passionate kisses with her husband. By the way, they’ve been married nearly 50 years. The flame still burns brightly.

     Do you remember your first passionate kiss? Or the last one?

    I hope you enjoy the videos.

Bobby Rydell - Kissin' Time

The Everly Brothers - Til Kissed You

Brian Hyland - Sealed With A Kiss

Betty Everett -- The Shoop Shoop Song (It's In His Kiss)

The Crystals - Then He Kissed Me

Hall and Oates -- Kiss Is On My List

Exile -- Kiss You All Over

Tom Jones - Kiss

Faith Hill - This Kiss

And one more!

Jesse Pearson in "Bye Bye Birdie" - One Last Kiss

xoxoxoxo